Story Blurb (until I think of something better): Two friends navigate sex, love, and… well… what appear to be super powers.
http://RowanMcBride.com/stories/serials/
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Like always I really like it. Angsty:)
Thank you! I actually think this’ll be one of my lighter stories. But you know me, it could go either way. 😉
Really good! I’m looking forward to reading more.
@Mel – I’m looking forward to writing it!
I’ve been a fan of your work for some time, so I was excited to see your update on Goodreads. I’m not ashamed to admit that I’ve read most of our works multiple times and I check your site on a semi-monthly basis just to see if you’ve written anything new.
I’m excited to see where this story is going. The bedroom scene, in particular, really helped to flesh out who the characters are (as well as who they are to each other) and made me connect to them as an outside reader.
I got the sense that you’re looking for feedback from your Goodreads post, so here goes!
Some questions I have after reading this chapter:
1) Who is Dylan? I know that he cares for Bobby and is protective of him. I also know that he’s experiencing a strange/mysterious muscle bulk that he feels self-conscious or shameful about. What I don’t yet know is who Bobby is beyond that–what he looks like, how he thinks, his mannerism, his personality.
2) Dylan seems to be fearful that is strength will scare Bobby away. Does he have reason to be concerned that he will hurt someone–and Bobby in particular? Did he inadvertently hurt someone in the past that we don’t know about yet? Does he has reason to fear that Dylan might become scared of him and/or stop being his friend if Dylan discovers just how strong Bobby really is?
3) Who are Dylan and Bobby to each other? Are they each other’s only friends? What initially brought them together? What has kept them close over time? And why hasn’t Dylan felt comfortable coming out to Bobby until now?
4) Why is Dylan freakishly strong? I know you’re planning to explain at some point–I’m just hoping if you’re willing to spoil the surprise for us now. 🙂
Like I said, I’m a big fan. I’m so glad you shared this chapter with us and I’ll be eagerly on the lookout for any new chapters you plan to post. 🙂
@Tish – Hey! Thank you for the feedback! It’s hella fun to see what readers think of a story chapter by chapter, which is the main reason I like writing serials so much. XD
As for specifics, I can say that some of your points will be addressed when they start school, while others gave me food for thought. I won’t tell you which is which, though. 😉
I will say, however, that I’m glad *you* have faith that I have an explanation for Dylan’s strength, because at this point I’m not so sure. Lol.
Hi Rowan,
Am loving the 2 chapters and the characters. Love the secondary characters of the brothers and their relationship, Sooo very bro like. Very interested to find out what is the root cause of the hightened physical abilities. Looking forward to more!